Evil Kingdoms & Food

I get it. Your evil kingdom is suuppper evil. They are just so evil that even where they live is somewhere scary.

I’ve briefly talked about this before, about how often in fantasy novels there is an evil lord taking over the kingdom, and they never really mention what he plans for after the fact.

Is gremlin number  578 going to become a farmer? And gremlin number 382 going to become the royal seamstress?

A lot of the time fantasy novels simply state that he is evil, he is taking over the kingdom, and he is killing everyone and everything as he goes. Not only that, he also lives in some sort of creepy wasteland of ice, volcanic rubble, or endless night. It is somewhere that the average person would not survive in, and it just makes him look even more creepy.

Unfortunately, this is a problem because he has to get his food somewhere. He’s killing everyone and everything, but we are still supposed to believe he is some sort of human-like creature. Hate to break it to you, but humans, animals, and human-like creatures all need to eat.

Both him and his army, are both going to need a food source. A lot of novels try to get around this by having his minions eat people, but eventually, the people are going to run out. If you are not farming the people, the people will run out.

All in all, it’s a major plot hole. This guy wants to take over the kingdom, but once he has it he is going to have nothing left. He wants this power, but once he has the power, he is ruling over…dust? And then he dies.

It is not a sustainable plan.

There are two major ways you can get around this.  The first is think of a food source. Maybe in his icy landscape, they eat seals and fish, or maybe in his volcanic rubble, there is life the manages to survive. Or maybe they are more advanced and have worked out underground gardening with some sort of artificial light source.

A second way to get around the cliche is to rethink your villains’ motives. If he really is living in some sort of area devoid of life, of course, he would want to get out. Maybe the reason why his kingdom is a volcanic wasteland is that a volcano erupted and it used to be a paradise. Now, his people are dying and he is trying to take over the enemy kingdom to save his own people. Now, you have a reason for both your villain and his army to be extremely motivated; if they fail, they are dead anyway. If they win, they have farming grounds again.

Just as an extra, one final, and unpopular way, to get around the cliche is to avoid having your evil villain in an “evil” landscape. It would be an interesting twist to have the villain in a lush green landscape not all that different from the lush green landscape the hero is from.

All in all, please remember one simple rule when coming up with your villain: even evil people need to eat.


Most Common High-Fantasy Enemy Problems

  1. Killing everyone. The enemy has an evil army and is killing everyone for world domination. But what happens when he wins? They are just killing everyone and taking no slaves, so who will be left to do everything? Will he make his evil goblin bake him cake? Will another one spend his days nurturing a crop of watermelons? Or will he sulk because he clearly didn’t think this plan through?
  2. Evil Creatures. An easy way to make an enemy is to say they are all evil creatures. Now, I love Lord of the Rings as much as the next nerd, but it gets a little old to believe that “oh, they follow him because they are all evil,” and that is that. You can have a war-hungry enemy, but it would make it seem more real if you give the army a reason to be war-hungry. Are they promised better farmland? Will they get power? Riches? What’s motivating them to listen to the king? Why do they care if they win?
  3. The faceless army. Too often writers only concern themselves with the heroes of stories and that makes an entire army of boring look-a-likes and the evil leader who we don’t meet until three books later. Give some of your enemies a name; show us that his army is as passionate as he is.
  4. No clear plan. They are supposed to be a smart enemy, but show us that! Show us them damming up the river upstream to stop water from getting to the good guys. Show us them spying, scouting, and giving false information. There can be more to an enemy army than facing off on in a field.

Picking Clothes (For Novels)

Too often clothes for characters are often picked but don’t really fit the character or the scene.
For example, heels. High-heels are everywhere. It’s something that just goes hand-in-hand with the action genre. The sleuth spy meets the mysterious heel-wearing beauty, the hardcore female vampire hunter who chases and gets chased, all in boots with heels. And the most common offender; cop dramas. We are supposed to believe she’s going to go arrest someone and means business, but she wears heels. Now, I will admit, that actress in Jurassic World ran in heels like a pro, but I’m sure her character was craving a set of runners. I get it, heels make women look more attractive, but in a fight or in a run, they are a disadvantage. Otherwise, more athletes would be seen sporting them. If your character is attending a ball or on a day off, go for it. If your character is planning to chase down bad guys, I’d advice against heels.
Put thought into what your character wears, and the results might surprise you. Sometimes what your character should wear is actually the exact opposite of what people would expect for them.
For example, your city thief would be more likely steal without getting caught dressed as a rich nobleman than dressing as an adventurer. The thief would want to dress in something to blend; not stand out. Everyone would be expecting someone dressed like an outlaw to be the thief, so instead be one of them.
Another example is your power hungry woman. Often they are described as suspicious as they actually are; a cruel smile, a cold gaze, and the clothes of someone pretending to be a queen. Instead, if she were smart, she could play the cards without anyone knowing she is in the game. Act shy, dress conservatively and pretend to be as small as possible. That way, when someone shows up dead, who would dare suspect sweet Jane?
Clothes do not just have to be something your character wears; they can be a disguise, a declaration of power, and a secret message. If a man wears a different flower in his pocket every day, that’s a way of communicating a message. If a woman wears all black after her son dies, that indicates she’s still in mourning and the death is a soft subject.
So the three questions you should ask yourself are; think of what is practical to your character, consider what the clothes make the people around think, and the third and final tip is to consider what the clothes say about the characters personality.

Boring Character Deaths

In a book I read recently, the main character meets a dude, falls madly in love, then the dude dies. We are supposed to be sad, but my thoughts were more along the lines of “oh well.”

It was not that the death itself was badly written, it was that all the relationship building with the main character was done in summary. We are told they trained together every night, but we were not there with them.

People need to remember that when you have relationship building moments between characters, it is also a relationship building moment for the reader. By summarizing all the relationship building moments, the readers never get the chance to build an opinion on the character. That leads to readers not really caring as much as we should when they character dies.

Character Hobbies

So imagine this; the sun has gone down and there is a lull in the action. So your character goes home, walks into their room, and is all alone. It is still too early for bed, so what do they do next?

Often in novels, the only defining trait of characters is their occupation. A knight fights, trains, and does his other knightly duties…but nothing else. Even in YA books, the teen characters are said to be average teens, but many books have teens that seem to have no personality.

Does your character like to read books? Play video games? Do they play an instrument? Do they love crossword puzzles?

When you add in hobbies to characters, it adds way more depth into personality.

For example, a grim trenchcoat giantly muscled superhero might be more interesting if someone walked into his house and discovered he is a collector of ceramic cats. A stereotypical cheerleader might be more interesting if she is secretly obsessed with video games and even cosplays to conventions.

We all do something when we do not have something to do. So my question to you writers out there is what does your character do when they have nothing else to do? What hobby do they have that is not related to their job?


Villains Before Heroes – NaNoWriMo Prep #2 (Newsletter 5)

Life Updates:

Last weekend I was able to try archery! My uncle owns an archery shipping supply store, so this year he gave me a bow, but I wasn’t actually able to try it until last weekend. I finally got a target, and practiced shooting. I wasn’t great at it, but I wasn’t horrible. The activity turned out to be really relaxing; and just might be my newest hobby! I also hope it also helps with any archery related writing I do from now on as well.

Writers Corner:

Newest Video:

I haven’t had the time to do a video at home, so I decided to do one on the way to work. I did not really work out as plan(coming out more like rambles then anything), but I tried to talk on my newest theory of creating the plan of the main villain before plotting the story of the main characters.

Featured Writers Resource:


Dying Last Words

The last words of someone dying is a cliche in fiction. In this video, I give some tops on how you might go about this problem a different way, and why you should.


A common pet-peeve of mine happens all the time in books and movies; final words of a dying person.
Imagine you come across a massacre. The enemy killed them all, and made sure to get any survivors. However; somehow, one person is left barely alive and he is able to tell you who did it before he dies. Out of hundreds of people, somehow he is the only one alive.
Commonly in medieval times, if someone important was captured, they would not kill them, they would sell that person back to the enemy for lots of money.
However, let’s say your enemy in your novel doesn’t want to do that; then wouldn’t they still want to do everything in their power to not kill the man who has the most information they could use?
Instead in novels, the leader is often found, barely alive, but able to say a few last words. For some reason, the enemy never cared to look for the most important person they were fighting against.
Final words normally serve for two purposes in novels; to give information, or to try and make us feel something.
If you want to make people feel heart broken, then final words might die more harm than good. Giving someone last words gives them a chance to say what things they wish they had said before; making us feel slightly less sad. However, sometimes the best way to break readers hearts it to make death sudden. For example, think of the lion king. The thing that made Muffasas death so heart breaking was not just because he had fought so hard to save his son, or because of the betrayal, but also because when Simba ran down to see him, his father was already dead. There were no last words; just Simba trying to wake his father up. The fact that Simba was not able to wrap things up with his father was what made it so hard to watch.
As for the last words for information, I strongly suggest you don’t do this more than once per novel. It can be really cheesy. There are other ways to get information too; the now dead person might have hidden a letter right before death, he might draw an arrow with his blood, or release all the messenger birds from their cage in hopes that the one with the letter makes it home without the enemy shooting at the right one.
So, that’s it for now! As usual, these are just my personal feelings and suggestions, so please do not take offence from anything I say.
Do any of you feel the same way? If so, please let me know in the comments below.
Thanks for watching! Bye!

Mentor Characters

Mentor Characters in novels can be extremely helpful. In this video, I list the most common mentor characters, and also why they can add more to your novel.


You will more than likely know a mentor character. Most commonly, they are really old, sometimes gruff, and are always there to give main characters advice. Is a mentor character what your novel is missing?

Before we talk about why mentor characters are used, I should probably talk about what types there are.

1. In Lord of the Rings and the Hobbit, there is Gandolph. In Harry Potter, there is Dumbledore. The wise-old mentor is, without a doubt, the most common mentor character in fantasy; and it is understandable.

2. Another commonly used one is the gruff lost old man. Most commonly, it is a man with a rough past who comes across a kid. This gruff old man sees the kid as a son or daughter, and softens up to them while also helping the kid along. Examples most people would know are Joel and Ellie from the game “The Last of us,” Wolverine and X-23 from the X-men, Brom and Eragon from the book Eragon, and so on.

The major problem with the wise-old-man and the gruff man is that they are most commonly doomed to die. Brom? Dead. Wolverine? Dead. Dumbledore? Dead. Gandalf? Dies and comes back. This happens because their propose was mostly to guide the main characters like a parent, so when the time comes for the main character to “grow up” and adventure off on their own, writers kill off the mentor character to force the main character onward. To me, this is what is what readers now expect to happen.

3. My favorite might just be the best friend. Sam is, without a doubt, a mentor character to Frodo. He always gives advice and keeps Frodo going. This one is not as commonly used because…well..friends in general are pretty rare for main characters. This character does not have to be timid or as emotional as Sam; they can actually be the rude one of the group who is rarely serious but gives great advice when needed.

4. Another one used is the romantic interest, but I don’t like that one as much. I think having a mentor character who is not a romantic interest is a great opportunity to show off what amazing other characters you have.

5. The last one is the dead character. This one happens occasionally in novels. What happens with this one is a character loses someone important to them and is going through a rough time, and the dead character comes back from the grave to give advice. Now, I don’t mean that literally, and I don’t even mean by ghosts what I mean is more of hallucinations. The main character is beat up and is about to give up and stop fighting when they get advice from the dead character in form of hallucination. Sometimes it is never explained on if the dead character was a hallucination or a ghost, but either way they give the main character a push to keep going.

Mentors are extremely important to novels; especially to younger main characters. There are times where people get lost and need a little bit of help to keep going. I think it is a great idea to have a mentor character in your novel. They allow your character to have a really deep moment of weakness, while also knowing exactly how to bring your main character out of it.

My only suggestions? Consider avoiding the wise-old-man because it is the most over done in my opinion. Also consider keeping the mentor alive, or at least keeping them alive past the half-way mark in your book since this happens too often. If you want to do something completely different, consider having the mentor character be a woman. Nearly all mentor character I have read have been male, so this might help separate your mentor character from others.

So thats it for now!

Do you have someone who is always trying to cheer your main character on? Are there any other mentor types I missed? Please let me know in the comments below.